By Irina Penn
Synopsis: Jade is overcome by a desire to self-harm
Location: Pretoria – South Africa
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I think this is a very good start, although I was a little confused whether or not you intended to make her a zombie, or if she is a vampire… I look forward to further developments in the script. I was a little bit taken aback by the fadeout. I would love to know your reasoning behind this. It might play better without that and instead cutting to something else for a brief second and then back to the sink… Just an idea. Definitely strong concept though.
Hi Nate,
Actually neither.
The infected are actually being controlled by the alien parasite.
See our think-tank research on this event right here.
http://www.journeyoftheseeds-themovie.com/what-caused-the-wipe-out-of-the-northern-hemisphere/
What the writers are trying to explore is what would be the effect of the parasites on humans. In this case the author has chosen self-harm.