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Synopsis

Post an apocalyptic attack, JJ, a power company lineman, finds himself injured, confused and searching through the heavily wooded region of Lancaster, Pennsylvania.  Having received a text from his fiancée Lindsey shortly before the attack – one which alludes to their relationship being in jeopardy – he knows she is working her station at the Kinzua Dam.  He fears she may be one of only a few people left who know how to stave off disaster. 

Spotting early signs of pending dam failure via swelling rivers and changing waterway patterns, he tries to make his way to the Kinzua Dam before there’s a breach in the heavily damaged structure.

Review task one

Read, rate and comment for 2000 points.

• Please ensure you read the reference material.  Everything you need to know about the alien life-form and the latest formula guide.
• Read the script.
• Rate it using the 1 – 5,  star review system that features on the post.

1 star = poor

2 stars = OK but not engaging

3 stars = engaging but it needs serious work

4 stars = very engaging

5 stars = a page turner

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• You may review the work based on any criteria. Your objective is to help the Author improve the work.
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Author’s questions

1) Are the primary characters compelling, do you empathize?

Ebuka Okparauzoma

From there on, Sentient Australia will take the lead to deliver fast plot advances and insights. The new plan’s objective is to enable our team to complete development of the Pilot and Season outline for each of the works, including Africa so we can take the works to market. We are already getting a lot of interest from some key players. Now, we have to deliver.