By Tony Vercoe
Location: Sydney to London – Live Skype call
Tag: “London calling to the zombies of death, quit holding out, and draw another breath”
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What I really like about this script is the distance between whats happening and whose being made aware of it, and that they’d have a natural desire to help but can’t. Not yet anyway. I really love the approach to this scene being based through a Skype call. Well done! Would love to see this one made as well. 🙂
I totallt agree HOD. There has to be a way of taking this back to the fantasy realm. I’m just thinking: maybe this whole thing is not the right path to start tjhe story at all? hmmm, I don’t know. I don’t mean to be harsh, but “end of the world” in high concept cinema doesn’t really turn into a fantasy with knights and elves. In “Lord of the Rings” it was (almost) the end of THAT world, therefore it maintained the fantasy genre from the beginning. Most of what I read, and probably my work as well, suggests an openning concept that has to be further discussed and pointed at the right direction for JOTS.
DM,
Yes, it seems this is the challenge. The Day one writers followed the brief. The issue is was it the correct way to go and I think that is your point.
The events of Day one figure strongly in the other world. The issue is how it is addressed and WHEN it is addressed. DAY ONE may not be our starting point. We may start well past that and refer back to it.
Even if we start front to back, it will be how we handle it but as mentioned by both of us it is a very important issue. Genre is all.
Day one – London calling by Tony Vercoe – review – Thursday, May 16, 2013
I rated TV’s ‘London calling’ 8 out of 10.
The title pays homage to the 70/80s rock band, ‘The Clash’ and their song of the same name. That’s a clever choice given the song’s subject material.
Tony has employed a curious hybrid of domestic drama meets horror, (‘Home and away’ meets ‘Night of the living dead’).
It ran over-time, did not employ gap, nor did it end on a cliffhanger BUT the author has employed ‘mise en scene’ in a very engaging way.
This interesting use of growing domestic chaos, realization of the global calamity and its revelation via Skype and smart device all comes to a head, which is underlined by the audio motif of the musical card.
The card makes for a poignant ending yet a wonderful juxtaposition throughout.
‘London calling’ may make for an excellent work. Proof is in the pudding. I think we need a shooting script for this from a director to see how they can do more than have us stare at screens. The transitions or movement between the locations poses some challenges but nothing that a good director cannot solve.
There is a potential for Team NY to film part of the work as well. We can include a number of units to achieve the work.
There is one major issue that Tony’s work and the ‘Day One’ project has raised.
If you were to see this kind of scene at the front end of a work, you would be think you were going to watch a, ‘28 days later’ genre style of horror movie yet we are in a supernatural fantasy.
This problem will need to be examined. Some anchors or moderators may need to be employed to ensure we don’t take people down the wrong path. That won’t be easy but by tasking the team with the Day One project, we revealed a new story challenge that has to be solved.
Nice work TV.